I'll just point out some of the obvious grammatical errors. I don't know how to describe the errors. I'll just write the introduction in a way that corrects them. "Belonging is a state of being accepted, a state of being understood by society. It is the process of trying to belong that allows a person to explore and evaluate their identity." It is a good introduction. What I would do next is tell the reader how the process of trying to belong allows a person to explore and evaluate who they are. I think that's a good point. You just need to back it up.
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